- There was nothing at stake for the main character.
- There wasn’t much tension.
- There wasn’t much emotion.
- The order of the scenes did not work together.
Editing my story on the computer screen wasn't working so I attempted to create a dummy. What is a dummy? According to Sue Bradford Edwards “a dummy is a mock-up of the actual picture book.” (1) Creating a dummy allows you too see where text and illustrations will go. It lets you see and feel what the story will look like in book format. What happens when the dummy isn’t working for you? I say cut the story up!
1. Enlarge the text and print it out.
2. Cut it up and lay it out (I used a bulletin board).
3. Rearrange the sentences so there is an order to them.
4. Whip out some handy post-its and use them to insert text.
6. Continue to add or take text away.
7. Read story out loud, again.
8. Continue to add or take text away until you are satisfied.
9. Take picture a of your hard work and type out your new story.
10. Print out your story and revise using a highlighter.
11. Create a one sentence pitch.
12. Submit story to critique group.
By the time I was finished half my original story was gone. My story went from 137 words to 241 words. I now have a beginning, middle, end. My protagonist has a reason for his actions. I even managed to introduce humour and tension into my story. Now all I need to do is submit it to my critique group!
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1. Edwards. Storyboarding. 2010 Children’s Writer’s & Illustrator’s Market.